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I recently re-started blogging puzzles, facts and writing book summaries. Can someone please review my website and most recent book review?
Atlas Shrugged by Ayn Rand
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Sunily,
I like your puzzles. I haven't read the book so no comments on the book review.

Also, I moved this to our "Blog around the Campfire" forum; a perfect place to discuss your blog.
 
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Great, thanks a lot Jeanne. Any suggestions for the puzzles part? or anything overall?
 
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Here's how I rewrote the first three sentences of your book review, FWIW:

you wrote:It starts with Dagny Taggart who is the Operating Vice President of Taggart Transcontinental, a giant railroad company originally pioneered by her grandfather, attempts to keep the company alive during difficult economic times marked by collectivism and statism.

While Dagny runs the company from behind the scenes, her brother, James Taggart, the railroad’s President, is peripherally aware of the company’s troubles, but will not make any difficult choices, preferring to avoid responsibility for any actions while watching his company go under.

He seems to make irrational decisions, such as preferring to buy steel from Orren Boyle’s Associated Steel, rather than Hank Rearden’s Rearden Steel, despite the former continually delaying delivery of vital rail.


Here's what I came up with:

I wrote:As Operating Vice President, Dagny Taggart attempts to keep Taggart Transcontinental, a giant railroad company originally pioneered by her grandfather, alive during difficult economic times marked by collectivism and statism.

While Dagny runs the railroad from behind the scenes, her brother and company President James Taggart, peripherally aware of the railroad's troubles, will not make the difficult choices needed to keep the company from going under, preferring instead to avoid any responsibility for his actions.

His decisions seem irrational, preferring to buy steel from Orren Boyle’s Associated Steel rather than Hank Rearden’s Rearden Steel, despite the former continually delaying delivery of vital rail.


 
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This is simply awesome. Let me incorporate these and similar changes into my other posts.
Thanks a ton Knute Snortum
 
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Do you have an account on wordpress or anywhere else which I can add to the post for credits?

Knute Snortum wrote:Here's how I rewrote the first three sentences of your book review, FWIW:

you wrote:It starts with Dagny Taggart who is the Operating Vice President of Taggart Transcontinental, a giant railroad company originally pioneered by her grandfather, attempts to keep the company alive during difficult economic times marked by collectivism and statism.

While Dagny runs the company from behind the scenes, her brother, James Taggart, the railroad’s President, is peripherally aware of the company’s troubles, but will not make any difficult choices, preferring to avoid responsibility for any actions while watching his company go under.

He seems to make irrational decisions, such as preferring to buy steel from Orren Boyle’s Associated Steel, rather than Hank Rearden’s Rearden Steel, despite the former continually delaying delivery of vital rail.


Here's what I came up with:

I wrote:As Operating Vice President, Dagny Taggart attempts to keep Taggart Transcontinental, a giant railroad company originally pioneered by her grandfather, alive during difficult economic times marked by collectivism and statism.

While Dagny runs the railroad from behind the scenes, her brother and company President James Taggart, peripherally aware of the railroad's troubles, will not make the difficult choices needed to keep the company from going under, preferring instead to avoid any responsibility for his actions.

His decisions seem irrational, preferring to buy steel from Orren Boyle’s Associated Steel rather than Hank Rearden’s Rearden Steel, despite the former continually delaying delivery of vital rail.


 
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Sunil Kumar wrote:Do you have an account on wordpress or anywhere else which I can add to the post for credits?


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